Critique please....

David Love · Posted: Tue Jun 17, 2008, 15:02 (GMT) Post subject: Critique please....

Here is my commercial demo. Constructive criticism welcome.

Melba Sibrel · Posted: Tue Jun 17, 2008, 15:20 (GMT) Post subject:

Hi, Dave. It's Ok technically. I have to say, though, there's nothing on there that makes me go WOW!

Your deadpan reads sound tentative. The first clip could have had a bit more sarcasm to it, but even if you were going to hang on to deadpan, you just really needed to push it -- be more of a character. What you miss (in most of what you've shown here, at least) is the ability to nuance. I don't hear an actor, I hear a reader. The problem is, most of those spots required a bit more acting.

On a bright note, I thought your Visa read was by far the best and the demo didn't really gel for me 'til then. That's your sweet spot right now, I think. And the Kit Kat was nice -- your tentativeness was actually quite cute there.

Note on the Canadian pronounciation of "about" -- learn how to pronounce that American and you'll expand your North American marketability a bit.

You could benefit perhaps from some script interp within an acting class that is not geared toward the VO business and some improv. As always, this is just my opinion.

David Love · Posted: Tue Jun 24, 2008, 06:37 (GMT) Post subject:

Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate it.