I would appreciate your opinions on my general demo.

Andrew Montesi Big Voice Productions · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 01:14 (GMT) Post subject:

Thanks for your input, Lance. Here is the reworked version (before your most recent comments). Let me know what you think I still might do to improve, in addition to adding the NBA spot back in.
Thanks,
Andrew

Lance Blair · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 04:51 (GMT) Post subject:

Getting better, Andrew! Miles better without the fades! Smile

The Riddick and Sith pieces are similar in tone, so I'm not sure about going Riddick-Durango-Sith right off the bat.

My order pick: ER/Durango/Games Room/Riddick/NBA/Mass 53rd/Sith

And the final piece somehow feels like its leaving us hanging - perhaps because it doesn't have a bed to it. It's wortwhile including to show your narration work...but I still like the NBA piece better, especially for a closing piece.

The Durango piece feels long even though it's good. You could stand to cut it at "they saw there".

I LOOOOOOOOOOOVE the Games Room Furniture bit. Now that's cool!

Andrew Montesi Big Voice Productions · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 15:47 (GMT) Post subject:

Hi Lance. I have taken all your suggestions. Please give a listen and let me know what you think. I value your opinions, and really appreciate all your help. Have a Happy and Prosperous '08.
Andrew Montesi

Andrew Montesi Big Voice Productions · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 16:27 (GMT) Post subject:

Well, here is the final demo. I want to thank all of you for your comments. I'm glad I fought my reluctance to post it up for criticism. I feel I have a better demo, as a result. Happy New Year to you all. I hope it is a healthy and prosperous one for us all.
Andrew
Very Happy

Lance Blair · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 17:16 (GMT) Post subject:

Excellent Andrew!

The only nit I'd pick is the fade at the end. You might be able to pull off a hard cut at "Sith" but I know that might not work.

It's amazing what demo order and editing can do. This just feels so much tighter and flows more...and I don't notice any mouth issues at all, I'm just going along for the ride with this demo and enjoying it.

Best of luck to you in 2008...and beyond! Smile

I feel like I just learned a lot; now it's time to get crackin' on my own wares.

Bob Bergen · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 19:26 (GMT) Post subject:

Andrew Montesi Big Voice Productions · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 20:16 (GMT) Post subject:

Thanks, again, Lance. I will figure out a way to eliminate the fade at the end. Hey, Bob. I hear what your saying about adding more genres of demos, but I did that about 2 months ago, adding specific demos for Promos, Commercials, Movie Trailers, and Radio/TV Imaging, but I immediately got less direct invitations than before I added them. Maybe it's just that the others need the same TLC I have given this General demo.
Later,
Andrew

Bob Bergen · Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007, 20:29 (GMT) Post subject: